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dangermousieDear Author -
1. When I buy a romance novel about a woman puchasing a gigolo at a bachelor auction by mistake, thinking she was getting a paramedic, I want a lot of things from the book. Wholesomeness isn't one of them. I thought that would be obvious. (Yes, you can have steamy scenes and still be wholesome - this could be on Amish Channels in all other respects).
2. The one time you are NOT wholesome? It doesn't work. Lots of things are sexy - toned bodies, fancy lingerie, watching a kdrama lead without his shirt. You know what is NOT sexy? Having your protagonists have hot steamy sex encounter in the play area of the day care center. Actually, that is rather sick. Make it very very sick. I wish I could claim that I think it so only because I am a mother and maybe you, Dear Author, are not, so did not realize the true ickiness. But sadly - even before I ever thought of having offspring, I would have found a make-out in such a place wildly inappropriate and disturbingly gross. See a therapist, Dear Author. Please.
3. Gigolo hero analogizing his job to heroine's - 'she takes care of strange children, I take care of strange ladies' is one thing. The book intending us to see it the same way is another.
4. Don't be wishy-washy. The dude's a gigolo. The whole 'he only did it with women he was attracted to and now he doesn't need to anyway because he's a rich businessman' (whaaaa?) is a total cop-out.
5. A few fun sexytimes do not equal true love or basis for a functioning relationship with a walking STD-carrier. Address.
6. Fine, you made your hero Irish. Irish and American accents are different. But as you are not phonetically writing out the way Annie sounds or even the rest of the time hero talks, every time you write hero saying 'Jaysus', I want to kill something.
7. Heroine's reaction on finding out her potential bf is a gigolo? 'Oh, that's OK, I know you love me anyway.' Hello! I'd have exhibited more outrage over the guy lying about his choice of hair color. A kdrama would have milked this for 5 eps straight.
All in all, blah blah blah. Bad book.
1. When I buy a romance novel about a woman puchasing a gigolo at a bachelor auction by mistake, thinking she was getting a paramedic, I want a lot of things from the book. Wholesomeness isn't one of them. I thought that would be obvious. (Yes, you can have steamy scenes and still be wholesome - this could be on Amish Channels in all other respects).
2. The one time you are NOT wholesome? It doesn't work. Lots of things are sexy - toned bodies, fancy lingerie, watching a kdrama lead without his shirt. You know what is NOT sexy? Having your protagonists have hot steamy sex encounter in the play area of the day care center. Actually, that is rather sick. Make it very very sick. I wish I could claim that I think it so only because I am a mother and maybe you, Dear Author, are not, so did not realize the true ickiness. But sadly - even before I ever thought of having offspring, I would have found a make-out in such a place wildly inappropriate and disturbingly gross. See a therapist, Dear Author. Please.
3. Gigolo hero analogizing his job to heroine's - 'she takes care of strange children, I take care of strange ladies' is one thing. The book intending us to see it the same way is another.
4. Don't be wishy-washy. The dude's a gigolo. The whole 'he only did it with women he was attracted to and now he doesn't need to anyway because he's a rich businessman' (whaaaa?) is a total cop-out.
5. A few fun sexytimes do not equal true love or basis for a functioning relationship with a walking STD-carrier. Address.
6. Fine, you made your hero Irish. Irish and American accents are different. But as you are not phonetically writing out the way Annie sounds or even the rest of the time hero talks, every time you write hero saying 'Jaysus', I want to kill something.
7. Heroine's reaction on finding out her potential bf is a gigolo? 'Oh, that's OK, I know you love me anyway.' Hello! I'd have exhibited more outrage over the guy lying about his choice of hair color. A kdrama would have milked this for 5 eps straight.
All in all, blah blah blah. Bad book.
